Students should be able to develop further on their script 2nd draft the dramatic units (problem, conflict, adapting to new circumstances, resolution, etc.) as well to have refined further each character developmental arc.
The second draft is all about fixing story problems like:
* Story structure: Dramatic Acts and plot points.
* Logic problems: Events happen or characters actions devoid of logic or dont make emotional sense.
* Lack of focus: Loose plotline, subplots, character functions, themes and transformation arcs.
* Emotion: A script reader wants to feel something. Is the emotional experience of the storyline working? What are the points of emotional resonance in the script?
Here is the first draft of the script down below.
How will you change it? How would you make it more intense between the two characters.
I want it to be more dramatic and sexual between the two. Develop a serious relationship with the two characters.