I wrote a short story. I came up with the short story on my own no other outside

I wrote a short story. I came up with the short story on my own no other outside sources were used and no other outside sources can be used while making adjustments to the story. Below attached will be the story that needs to be adjusted. These are comments and statements that are suggested to use to fix the short story.
-My teacher thinks a lot of this reads like an outline to your story, or like a character sketch, as you are developing the full picture of your story and characters. Start with Jamie as she works in the jungle and show us in scene what is important to her and her relationships with these other characters. That will make it compelling to readers and make her come more alive.
-Come up with a title name for the short story that’s provided.
-work on the dialogue
-add an intense conversation that Jamie can have with another character